Hi, guys, I really need some help
Does any of you know, if a character speaks at the very same time they do an action (for an example, someone smiles as they say something, or starts a car while talking etc.), whether the direction that refers to the action they do should be parenthetical or written as a separated action instruction? If the second option is the one customarily used, is it usual to add 'as they say the next/the last line' next to the instruction?
I've really looked for the answer among all the screenplay format guides and advice I could find online and yet haven't found the answer, so I'd really be EXTREMELY THANKFUL to the one who helps me solve the problem thank you all so much
Parenthetical Direction Question
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Re: Parenthetical Direction Question
Here is a post by Dr. Format that addresses your questions.
ACTION AND PARENTHETICALS
QUESTION
Is the following example correct?
ANSWER
Action should be written as action, unless that action can be described in just a few words (tipping his hat). Also, do not end a dialogue block with a parenthetical; end it with dialogue. Finally, the dialogue in the example above is stiff; let's make it more natural. At the same time, we'll try to give the scene a little more movement. Here is my revision:
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ACTION AND PARENTHETICALS
QUESTION
Is the following example correct?
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JACK
(grabs Jill by the
hand)
Could sure use some water,
my dear.
(a beat; starts up
the hill)
JILL
(snatches the bucket
out of his hand)
Sounds like a good idea, Jack.
(swings bucket around
and around as they near
the well)
ANSWER
Action should be written as action, unless that action can be described in just a few words (tipping his hat). Also, do not end a dialogue block with a parenthetical; end it with dialogue. Finally, the dialogue in the example above is stiff; let's make it more natural. At the same time, we'll try to give the scene a little more movement. Here is my revision:
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Jack shows Jill his empty bucket.
JACK
Water?
Jill snatches the bucket.
JILL
Race ya.
She swings the bucket around as they gallop to the well.
If you would like to read more articles from Dr. Format, you may find them here:
http://www.screenplay.com/t-Dr_Format.aspx
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