What is a Story Goal? The MCs or bor bird's perspective?
Posted: Apr 15, 2015 9:02 am
I am struggling to define a story goal. I have outlined my story like 100 times, and find it quite appealing. I have tried to use Dramatica as I think the software could elevate the story. But I always get turned back entering question 200 or something.
My story is about a fallen, drinking director. He has lots of ideas - an insane idea for a reality show. He presents the plot to a broadcaster (without knowing the guy is representing a broadcaster) drunk.
As his girlfriend leaves him, he is offered to realize his crazy idea. The show is about surviving a "new civilization" in a dome in Artic, remote areas. The participants are to live in a dome. Half of them drugged as Neanderthals, half of them still have their intellect intact. Who will win? It is a big prize in the end. The show is THE most spectacular, and the participants agrees to go into the show with their life on stake.
The director has bills to pay and undertake to realizes the show - though in doubt. It is to crazy. To little thought through. In the casting process he casts a sociopath (Zorac) who wants to win the prize whatever it takes. His girlfriend, Cynthia, is a crazy girl, suffering from Shizo. The director likes her.
The show goes wild, as the Director thought. An intence violence is soon exposed. The production crew leaves the production, leaving the director and the broadcaster and some scientific guys alone in the remote area.
For the first time in his life the director understand that his wild imagination has consequences to REAL people. They actually KILL each other. He has to restore order, but the broadcaster has NEVER had higher ratings. They want to continue.
As the audience can interact with the reality show, they decide that the wall separating two worlds inside the dome (one of the world is normal people, the other half is injected with a serum, turning them into neanderthals). The director has to enter the bubble and be a part of the show himself, to turn off the wall, seperating the two cultures.
As soon as he does, Armageddon is loose. The participants starts to eat each other. Mattias has never faced his own fears, and is now more fearful than ever. He have to survive.
One of the participant (The antagonist???) didnt take the serum. He is just pretending being retarded to win the big prize. He want the show to go on, as he can pay off debt to his creditors and thus survive. The director understands this and are afraid of him. At the same time, he has fallen in love with this guys girlfriend.
When the creditors enter the Artic, they mess up the system and the artificial dome explodes. All of the sudden the temperature is down to minus 40 degrees. The director and his new found love, has to escape to the harbour, where a boat will pick up people the director says is ok. The bad guy joins him - and it is a dysfunctional gang that heads to the harbour in the cold.
To survive, the director understand he will be killed as soon as he enters the boat. The bad guy has to be killed. For the first time he uses violence. I am not finished with the end yet, but I think it goes like the bad guy gets killed and the Director lives on with his love and change career.
Overall: It is about big dreams, to big to be cool, breaken apart,and understanding.
What would YOU suggest as a story goal? Isnt the story goal much the same as the main character - the director? And what time to enter the story?
Thx
My story is about a fallen, drinking director. He has lots of ideas - an insane idea for a reality show. He presents the plot to a broadcaster (without knowing the guy is representing a broadcaster) drunk.
As his girlfriend leaves him, he is offered to realize his crazy idea. The show is about surviving a "new civilization" in a dome in Artic, remote areas. The participants are to live in a dome. Half of them drugged as Neanderthals, half of them still have their intellect intact. Who will win? It is a big prize in the end. The show is THE most spectacular, and the participants agrees to go into the show with their life on stake.
The director has bills to pay and undertake to realizes the show - though in doubt. It is to crazy. To little thought through. In the casting process he casts a sociopath (Zorac) who wants to win the prize whatever it takes. His girlfriend, Cynthia, is a crazy girl, suffering from Shizo. The director likes her.
The show goes wild, as the Director thought. An intence violence is soon exposed. The production crew leaves the production, leaving the director and the broadcaster and some scientific guys alone in the remote area.
For the first time in his life the director understand that his wild imagination has consequences to REAL people. They actually KILL each other. He has to restore order, but the broadcaster has NEVER had higher ratings. They want to continue.
As the audience can interact with the reality show, they decide that the wall separating two worlds inside the dome (one of the world is normal people, the other half is injected with a serum, turning them into neanderthals). The director has to enter the bubble and be a part of the show himself, to turn off the wall, seperating the two cultures.
As soon as he does, Armageddon is loose. The participants starts to eat each other. Mattias has never faced his own fears, and is now more fearful than ever. He have to survive.
One of the participant (The antagonist???) didnt take the serum. He is just pretending being retarded to win the big prize. He want the show to go on, as he can pay off debt to his creditors and thus survive. The director understands this and are afraid of him. At the same time, he has fallen in love with this guys girlfriend.
When the creditors enter the Artic, they mess up the system and the artificial dome explodes. All of the sudden the temperature is down to minus 40 degrees. The director and his new found love, has to escape to the harbour, where a boat will pick up people the director says is ok. The bad guy joins him - and it is a dysfunctional gang that heads to the harbour in the cold.
To survive, the director understand he will be killed as soon as he enters the boat. The bad guy has to be killed. For the first time he uses violence. I am not finished with the end yet, but I think it goes like the bad guy gets killed and the Director lives on with his love and change career.
Overall: It is about big dreams, to big to be cool, breaken apart,and understanding.
What would YOU suggest as a story goal? Isnt the story goal much the same as the main character - the director? And what time to enter the story?
Thx